One day, I came home from school, my parents told me that our family was going to go on a cruise! So we packed our bags and were off. The first step was to get our bags checked and take a 4 hour flight to Florida. After that,we stayed overnight at a hotel and then boarded the ship.
The first day was confusing because the ship is 11 stories and finding everything on the ship takes a while, but after a while you get the ship mapped out. Our first stop was at Nassau, of the Bahamas. There me and my dad got to go snorkeling and see famous peoples houses like Oprah's and Michael Jordan's. Our second stop was at Ocho Rios, Jamaica. There our whole family got to go to Dunn's River Falls, which is a giant water fall you get to climb up.
Our third stop was at Grand Caiman. Me and my dad got to go snorkeling at a ship wreck and a giant reef with tons of beautiful fish. Our fourth and final stop was at Cozumel. All we did there was buy souvenirs. The next day are ship arrived back at Fort Lauderdale and it was time to go home.
I think you did a good job at describing what you did on your cruise, but I think one thing that would make your Memoir better was to describe one of the things you did. For example, you could describe what it was like to climb up the waterfall. But otherwise, good job!
ReplyDeleteYou should use a little more detail. (How do you climb up a waterfall?)
ReplyDeleteGood story I bet the snorkeling part was fun! I agree how do you climb up a waterfall?
ReplyDeleteI also agree. How do you climb a waterfall? I want to try snorkeling so badly. What kind of fish did you get to see?
ReplyDeleteYou should describe climbing up the water fall. That must have been fun
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